It has been interesting seeing this project develop and your final designs for Shiela demonstrate that development. She is an appealing character with a good range of expressions and gestures, particularly illustrated with your animation layout. However having discussed this project, I am disappointed the secondary character hasn’t been included or developed.
Your environment design for the night club is also strong. Considering the scale, your concept is actually very readable with a great sense of depth. However I feel like a close up of foreground detail would help the audience understand the nightclub setting more. Your storyboard also feels very undeveloped. I feel that it needs to be expanded with a better range of camera angles to heighten the emotion and anxiety of the central character. I think some shots from the audience or secondary characters (mentor, other performs, an audience member etc) would also drive home the narrative.
In conclusion, I think that despite your appealing and developed central character your story feels undeveloped. I would highly recommend developing at least one additional character, based on our previous discussions or perhaps a random audience member, fleshing out some background detail, and redeveloping the story to include these elements. I think with these additional elements, your design bible will better reflect your theme and narrative. - Justin
Frankie Sutton
ReplyDeleteIt has been interesting seeing this project develop and your final designs for Shiela demonstrate that development. She is an appealing character with a good range of expressions and gestures, particularly illustrated with your animation layout. However having discussed this project, I am disappointed the secondary character hasn’t been included or developed.
Your environment design for the night club is also strong. Considering the scale, your concept is actually very readable with a great sense of depth. However I feel like a close up of foreground detail would help the audience understand the nightclub setting more. Your storyboard also feels very undeveloped. I feel that it needs to be expanded with a better range of camera angles to heighten the emotion and anxiety of the central character. I think some shots from the audience or secondary characters (mentor, other performs, an audience member etc) would also drive home the narrative.
In conclusion, I think that despite your appealing and developed central character your story feels undeveloped. I would highly recommend developing at least one additional character, based on our previous discussions or perhaps a random audience member, fleshing out some background detail, and redeveloping the story to include these elements. I think with these additional elements, your design bible will better reflect your theme and narrative. - Justin